Black Ghost

Nicely done. Like Adam said, there isn't much to crit, but I still have a few comments. :D Her shirt didn’t go low, and wasn’t very tight she wore a ...

FireArris, I think she made it pretty clear who her master is....(ahem, *GOD* :wink: ) But yeah, you did an awesome job of telling us who his master is without ...

This was pretty cool, Snoink :D . I really liked the two characters Christian and Pearl, you made them very distinct from each other which made the dialogue and stuff ...

Thanks for the critiques! I thought I'd return the favor. :P ____ Once upon an ancient past a seed was buried and from that very seed sprouted a sapling. The ...

Hi there! Not a bad piece, not a good piece. It isn't so much that your writing is bad, it's just that this is so very short, that it's hard ...

This piece had a nice fluidity to it, and your style is very good, it keeps the reader interested. But the only thing I noticed is that you used a ...

…ah, all right I don't know if it matters at all, but maybe you should just capitalize the first "a". I know it's not the beginning of sentence, but it's ...

There it was hanging and gliding back and forth , the villain upside down hanging by a single rope that kept him alive. He was high hanging from a sky ...

This was interesting. More of a series of broken images than a coherent story, and the last line makes me wonder if this is a story at all, or just ...

Hi! I thought this was really good, you had good description throughout the story, and I thought the dream sequence was done well. Here's a few things I would take ...

This was a good way. Your description was pretty top notch, and although it was short, I think you got your point across about the horrors of the sickness. Not ...

Snoink, I love your short stories. This was extremely well written, and I couldn't find any typos on my read over, but I just wanted to comment that I got ...

Hi Sam! I liked this piece a lot, I don't know why, maybe it's just how simplistic it is and the way you tell it. Anyway, I like the story ...

This was pretty good. You had really good description throughout, and I didn't really spot any typos. The only thing I would change is the end, with the shadow. It's ...

Haha, pulling a Brad.... And I agree that this poem has no meaning whatsoever and that you should lose the elipses. Start over on some other poem and don't worry ...